Show, Don’t Tell

Show, don’t tell

"Show, don’t tell" means letting readers experience a story through actions, senses, and dialogue instead of outright explaining things. Here are some practical tips to achieve that:

1. Use Sensory Details

Tell: "The room was cold."

Show: "Her breath puffed in faint clouds, and she shivered as frost clung to the edges of the window."

Tell: "He was scared."

Show: "His hands trembled, and his heart thudded so loudly he was sure they could hear it too."

2. Focus on Actions

Tell: "She was angry."

Show: "She slammed the mug onto the counter, coffee sloshing over the rim as her jaw clenched."

Tell: "He was exhausted."

Show: "He stumbled through the door, collapsing onto the couch without even bothering to remove his shoes."

3. Use Dialogue

What characters say and how they say it can reveal their emotions, intentions, or traits.

Tell: "She was worried about the storm."

Show: "Do you think it'll reach us?" she asked, her voice tight, her fingers twisting the hem of her shirt.

4. Show Internal Conflict Through Thoughts or Reactions

Tell: "He was jealous of his friend."

Show: "As his friend held up the trophy, he forced a smile, swallowing the bitter lump rising in his throat."

5. Describe the Environment to Reflect Mood

Use the setting to mirror or hint at emotions or themes.

Tell: "The town was eerie."

Show: "Empty streets stretched into the mist, and the only sound was the faint creak of a weathered sign swinging in the wind."

6. Let Readers Infer Through Context

Give enough clues for the reader to piece things together without spelling it out.

Tell: "The man was a thief."

Show: "He moved through the crowd, fingers brushing pockets, his hand darting away with a glint of gold."

7. Use Subtext in Interactions

What’s left unsaid can reveal as much as what’s spoken.

Tell: "They were uncomfortable around each other."

Show: "He avoided her eyes, pretending to study the painting on the wall. She smoothed her dress for the third time, her fingers fumbling with the hem."

8. Compare to Relatable Experiences

Use metaphors, similes, or comparisons to make an emotion or situation vivid.

Tell: "The mountain was huge."

Show: "The mountain loomed above them, its peak disappearing into the clouds, as if it pierced the heavens."

Practice Example:

Tell: "The village had been destroyed by the fire."

Show: "Charred beams jutted from the rubble like broken ribs, the acrid smell of ash lingering in the air. A child's shoe lay half-buried in the soot, its leather curled from the heat."

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Neocities Guide - Why You Should Build Your Own Html Website

neocities guide - why you should build your own html website

do you miss the charm of the 90s/00s web where sites had actual personality instead of the same minimalistic theme? are you feeling drained by social media and the constant corporate monopoly of your data and time? do you want to be excited about the internet again? try neocities!!

what is neocities?

neocities is a free hosting website that lets you build your own html website from scratch, with total creative control. in their own words: "we are tired of living in an online world where people are isolated from each other on boring, generic social networks that don't let us truly express ourselves. it's time we took back our personalities from these sterilized, lifeless, monetized, data mined, monitored addiction machines and let our creativity flourish again."

why should I make my own website?

web3 has been overtaken by capitalism & conformity. websites that once were meant to be fun online social spaces now exist solely to steal your data and sell you things. it sucks!! building a personal site is a great way to express yourself and take control of your online experience.

what would I even put on a website?

the best part about making your own site is that you can do literally whatever the hell you want! focus on a specific subject or make it a wild collection of all your interests. share your art! make a shrine for one of your interests! post a picture of every bird you see when you step outside! make a collection of your favorite blinkies! the world is your oyster !! here are some cool example sites to inspire you: recently updated neocities sites | it can be fun to just look through these and browse people's content! space bar | local interstellar dive bar creature feature | halloween & monsters big gulp supreme peanutbuttaz | personal site dragodiluna linwood | personal site patho grove | personal site

getting started: neocities/html guide

sound interesting? here are some guides to help you get started, especially if you aren't familiar with html/css sadgrl.online webmastery | a fantastic resource for getting started with html & web revival. also has a layout builder that you can use to start with in case starting from scratch is too intimidating web design in 4 minutes | good for learning coding basics w3schools | html tutorials templaterr | demo & html for basic web elements eggramen test pages | css page templates to get started with sadgrl background tiles | bg tiles rivendell background tiles | more free bg tiles

fun stuff to add to your site

want your site to be cool? here's some fun stuff that i've found blinkies-cafe | fantastic blinkie maker! (run by @transbro & @graphics-cafe) gificities | internet archive of 90s/00s web gifs internet bumper stickers | web bumper stickers momg | gif gallery 99 gif shop | 3d gifs 123 guestbook | add a guestbook for people to leave messages cbox | add a live chat box moon phases | track the phases of the moon gifypet | a little clickable page pet adopt a shroom | mushroom page pet tamaNOTchi | virtual pet crossword puzzle | daily crossword imood | track your mood neko | cute cat that chases your mouse pollcode | custom poll maker website hit counter | track how many visitors you have

web revival manifestos & communities

also, there's actually a pretty cool community of people out there who want to bring joy back to the web! melonland project | web project/community celebrating individual & joyful online experiences. Also has an online forum melonland intro to web revival | what is web revival? melonking manifesto | status cafe | share your current status nightfall city | online community onio.cafe | leave a message and enjoy the ambiance sadgrl internet manifesto | yesterweb internet manifesto | sadly defunct, still a great resource reclaiming online social spaces | great manifesto on cultivating your online experience

in conclusion

i want everyone to make a neocities site because it's fun af and i love seeing everyone's weird personal sites that they made outside of the control of capitalism :) say hi to me on neocities

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This is so old and I’m not finishing it

5 months ago

If I wasn't paying attention to the road today I'd have some venison in a pot and a rack on my wall. Sassy buck did a gay little walk across the road

It's weird hearing from my mutuals and followers that they've never seen a ton of wildlife before. A couple months back I saw a moose just crossing the street. Just today I encountered a family of deer just walking along a couple feet away from me. People in concrete jungles are missing out

1 week ago

Rebloging this for good luck on my own exams, probably jinxed myself by doing so but ah well

orgo 2 exam #3 tomorrow 😭😭 a little behind on studying but i still have time in the morning cause all i need to do really is the practice exam.

just wish i knew what's gonna be on the exam's reference sheet because theres like 25 complex reactions w/ unique reagents and rules i have to memorize on top of other stuff 💀

but considering i got a 79% on exam 2 with relatively similar study methods i should be okay!! i just want this to be over already 🙏

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Hi all! Sorry for not posting for a while but I'm happy to announce that I turn 17 today! Also here's an Anemone haunted by Albatross and bodyguard Pike because I got nothing else.

Hi All! Sorry For Not Posting For A While But I'm Happy To Announce That I Turn 17 Today! Also Here's
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Might draw fanart of this if I can remember.

I've been thinking about what the outcome would be if Icicle actually fought Glacier. and well, I think I have an outcome that would make a nice little short story. Icicle lay on a bed within the palace infirmary. To her, today would have been better if she had just died. She had assumed the worst outcome to challenging her aunt would be her death. Icicle knew that at the end of this day, she would either sit upon the throne of the icewings, or be dead. She never considered this outcome. Her rear right claw, what is left of it, lay bandaged, the blue blood staining the bandages. “What good is a daughter who fails at her only purpose!” The words of her mother rang in her head. This is the single worst day of her life, and the reason just walked through the doorway. “Princess Icicle?” A shiver went down her spine as Icicle raised her head. Trying to get up to stand at attention. “No no, don’t get up. I don’t want you to pass out.” Icicle shifted in the bed. “So, have you come to banish me to some far off island?” Glacier did her best to comfort her previous challenger. “Actually, I don’t want you to go anywhere.” Icicle looks rather surprised. “From this day forward. Your mother and father are relieved of authority over you. From now on. You answer to me and me alone.” Icicle takes a minute to respond “why? Why are doing this?” Glacier lets out a sigh. “Because I never cared for how your parents have treated you. To Tundra, to Narwhal, they have ever only seen you has a tool to gain power. To kill me, and be the power behind the throne with you as queen. They manipulated you, never truly caring about the dragoness that they were supposed to protect and raise.” Glacier breathed in, then let out another sigh. “So no, you are not banished. In fact, I would prefer if you remained on palace grounds for the foreseeable future. So please, rest up, it will take time for you to heal.We'll talk about what comes next tomorrow.”... (end of WIP)

9 months ago

I really like this. I like the floating stone. At first I thought it was darkstalker sitting alone in the abandoned Nightwing city. I like his face and the toe nails.

Stonemover

Stonemover

Attack for Nuoritalvi on artfight

2 months ago

Silkwing window art!

Quite crooked, I had to get used to the tubes, the outline often comes in lumps, but I have more or less adapted, so the next stained glass will be much neater))

Silkwing Window Art!
Silkwing Window Art!
Silkwing Window Art!

It looks best on the window, because it is translucent, and the outline is visible. Without backlighting, my crooked fill is visible)))

It also glows in the Ultraviolet!

Silkwing Window Art!

The next window art will be much more accurate, it will be an Icewing!

Silkwing Window Art!

You also can do such by yourself, you can use my stained glass lines from HERE, I just put printed line in document bag (i guess it is called like this on eng) and drew with the window paints on it.

2 weeks ago
New Shortwing! A Silver Whip-tail
New Shortwing! A Silver Whip-tail
New Shortwing! A Silver Whip-tail

New shortwing! A silver whip-tail

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