Some doodles and mini facts about Au ⛸️
I don't support Jax's action in any way 🙅♂️
Episode 3 Slasher Designs! Featuring Martha and The Angel
So proud with how these two turned out! There wont be any character cards for episode 4, but there will be cards for some of the abstracted characters, so look forward to seeing those! These will also be added to the Masterpost
Who me? Hehe
@funnybreadd jumpscared me with this in DMs and I haven’t stopped crying/pos
SHE GOT THE CAST TO HYPE ME UP 🥺😭🥺😭🥺😭
This entire AU was by @croissantberry
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Why didn't he see it coming? Why didn't he do enough? Jax could have done more.
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"And they call you a God?” Kaufmo placed his foot on top of Pomni’s back, pressing down. He held the gnosis to the sun, letting the sun shine off it.
“Get the fuck away from her!” Jax screamed at him. Kaufmo's hundreds of eyes snapped to him; seeing the rabbit trying reach for his sword. The grueling pain he felt, trying to move his body, even an inch; the strain on his muscles as he ulled his entire body across the ground.
The harbinger strolled over to him. Bubble shot in front of up Kaufmo, gathering their strength to protect Jax, but only got popped with a flick of his finger.
“They call you the mighty traveler?” Kaufmo sheathed the sword of his back; holding it over the rabbit's hand, and then plummeting to an inch of his hand. The Harbinger hit hard on the sword's bottom, sending plummeting further. Jax cried out in pain; blood pooling out of his hand, painting the cobblestone streets in crimson.
"Jax!”
“What a joke,” Kaufmo chuckled, “You both deserve each other.”
Here's pomni civilian design
A while ago I got an idea for DJ Jax and ballerina Pomni. Couldn't get it out of my head since.
(climbs out of the trenches covered in mud) pant...pant...chapter five it here.
(from a writer of ten years)
So you’re back in the writing trenches. You’re staring at your computer, or your phone, or your tablet, or your journal, and trying not to lose your mind. Because what comes after the first quotation mark? Nothing feels good.
Don’t worry, friend. I’m your friendly tumblr writing guide and I’m here to help you climb out of the pit of writing despair.
I’ve created a character specifically for this exercise. His name is Amos Alejandro III, but for now we’ll just call him Amos. He’s a thirty-something construction worker with a cat who hates him, and he’s just found out he has to go on a quest across the world to save his mother’s diner.
One of the biggest struggles writers face when writing dialogue is keeping characters’ dialogue “in-character”.
You’re probably thinking, “but Sparrow, I’m the creator! None of the dialogue I write can be out of character because they’re my original characters!”
WRONG. (I’m hitting the very loud ‘incorrect’ buzzer in your head right now).
Yes, you created your characters. But you created them with specific characteristics and attitudes. For example, Amos lives alone, doesn’t enjoy talking too much, and isn’t a very scholarly person. So he’s probably not going to say something like “I suggest that we pursue the path of least resistance for this upcoming quest.” He’d most likely say, “I mean, I think the easiest route is pretty self-explanatory.”
Another example is a six-year-old girl saying, “Hi, Mr. Ice Cream Man, do you have chocolate sundaes?” instead of “Hewwo, Ice Cweam Man— Chocowate Sundaes?”
Please don’t put ‘w’s in the middle of your dialogue unless you have a very good and very specific reason. I will cry.
Yes, the girl is young, but she’s not going to talk like that. Most children know how to ask questions correctly, and the ‘w’ sound, while sometimes found in a young child’s speech, does not need to be written out. Children are human.
So, consider the attitude, characteristics, and age of your character when writing dialogue!
If I’m reading a novel and I see an entire page of dialogue without any breaks, I’m sobbing. You’re not a 17th century author with endless punctuation. You’re in the 21st century and people don’t read in the same way they used to.
Break up your dialogue. Use long sentences. Use one word. Use commas, use paragraph breaks. Show a character throwing a chair out a window in between sentences.
For example:
“So, you’re telling me the only way to save my Ma’s diner is to travel across five different continents, find the only remaining secret receipt card, and bring it back before she goes out of business? She didn’t have any other copies? Do I have to leave my cat behind?”
vs.
Amos ran a hand over his face. “So, you’re telling me the only way to save my Ma’s diner is to travel across five different continents, find the only remaining secret recipe card, and bring it back before she goes out of business?”
He couldn’t believe his luck. That was sarcastic, of course. This was ironically horrible.
“She didn’t have any other copies?” He leaned forward over the table and frowned. “Do I have to leave my cat behind?”
The second version is easier to digest, and I got to add some fun description of thought and action into the scene! Readers get a taste of Amos’ character in the second scene, whereas in the first scene they only got what felt like a million words of dialogue.
DON’T OVERUSE DIALOGUE TAGS. DON’T. DON’T DON’T DON’T.
If you don’t know what a dialogue tag is, it’s a word after a sentence of dialogue that attributes that dialogue to a specific character.
For example:
“Orange juice and chicken ramen are good,” he said.
‘Said’ functions as the dialogue tag in this sentence.
Dialogue tags are good. You don’t want to completely avoid them. (I used to pride myself on how I could write stories without any dialogue tags. Don’t do that.) Readers need to know who’s speaking. But overusing them, or overusing weird or unique tags, should be avoided.
Examples:
“I’m gonna have to close my diner,” Amos’ mother said.
“Why?” Amos growled. “It’s been in the family forever.”
“I’ve lost the secret recipe card, and I can’t keep the diner open without it!” she cried.
“The Bacon Burger Extreme recipe card?” Amos questioned.
“Yes!” Amos’ mother screamed.
“Well, that’s not good,” Amos complained.
vs.
“I’m gonna have to close my diner,” Amos’ mother said, taking her son’s hand and leading him over to one of the old, grease-stained tabletops with the ripped-fabric booths.
Amos simply stared at her as they moved. “Why? It’s been in the family forever.”
“I’ve—” she looked away for a moment, then took in a breath. “I’ve lost the secret recipe card. And I can’t keep the diner open without it.”
“The Bacon Burger Extreme recipe card?”
“Yes!” She still wouldn’t meet his eyes, and her shoulders were shaking. “Yes.”
Amos sat down heavily in the booth. “Well, that’s not good.”
The first scene only gives character names and dialogue tags. There are no actions and no descriptions. The second scene, however, gives these things. It gives the reader descriptions of the diner, the characters’ actions, and attitudes. Overusing dialogue tags gets boring fast, so add interest into your writing!
So! When you’re writing, consider the attitude of your character, vary dialogue length, and don’t overuse dialogue tags.
Now climb out of the pit of writing despair. Pick up your pen or computer. And write some good dialogue!
Best,
Sparrow
Tessa and Cyn from Murder Drones. I got into Murder Drones at the start of my freshman year. The finale came out now that I'm about to begin my senior year. I'm glad this story was a part of my journey. Medieval swords are peak sci-fi
Coffee date 💕✨
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Continuing the fall ship art with good ol’ Funnybunny 😌
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Might hold a poll either here or on Twitter on who should be next 👀✨