Davilovesty - Tarlos Love/Tavi Love

@ronenstrand

I’ve been seeing some frustration in the LS fandom lately, and I totally get it!

It’s upsetting how often Carlos is being written as a neglectful workaholic in every new Jonah fic. And honestly, I don’t blame the writers who write him this way - this is what the show gave us. They wanted to portray a distant Carlos, and if people interpreted that as neglect, well, they’re not wrong. And yes, he was grieving and trying to find his dad’s killer but it doesn’t mean he wasn’t neglecting and treating TK like shit. Both opinions are correct.

But what really gets under my skin even more is how TK is being portrayed in so many of these fics - like a housewife. It was already disappointing enough that the show made him quit his job for some made-up reason, but now these stories are doubling down and reducing him to nothing more than that. No passion, no fire, no spark. Just a soft, domestic placeholder for boring, emotional kicks. I don’t read Jonah or kid fics, and I don’t plan to ever - but the way Tarlos is being written lately as this sexless, lifeless pair with no real depth is starting to wear on me. They were never like that. That’s not who they are.

more than SEVEN-SENTENCES SUNDAY The new story is coming along well... here's a tease of it.

@ronenstrand

TK closes his eyes just to rest them. He’s so tired. He must have drifted off because he doesn’t remember the door coming to a stop. He doesn’t remember getting up, walking, or moving at all. When he opens his eyes, he’s in an overcrowded hospital. There’s chatter, moans, soft screams, and crying. It’s not loud, but it’s noisy. His head is pounding, his throat is dry, and he just wants to get up and find Carlos. 

When he sits up, he winces. The pain in his ribs is excruciating. He folds his arm around himself only to find that he’s been bandaged. The piece of metal in his thigh is gone, and it, as well as his calf, have both also been bandaged. Though incredibly grateful, he’s confused as to how he got here; how he had been so out of it that he remembers none of it all.

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Me:

@ronenstrand @hopefulwonderlandrunaway

I’m noticing a trend here. Comments and feedback on all the stories I’ve seen on ao3 seem to be simply giving praise. Who doesn’t love to hear praise on the story they’ve put so much work into? But here’s the thing… these comments and the feedback don’t seem to be giving much in the way of advice or constructive criticism to help the authors better themselves and improve their writing. THIS is the kind of feedback I crave!

Absolutely I love to hear praise! But I want to improve my writing. I want to know my readers are happy and being taken care of. Tell me if I could make the story more gripping. Tell me if it’s too mushy. Tell me if it doesn’t have enough raw emotion. Want me to make you cry? Let me know so I can rip your heart out. Want to laugh more? Tell me so I can toss in some silly moments or stupid jokes. Or do something so outrageous you’ll need stitches. Is the writing itself not great? I need to know so I can take a refresher course or something. Or give me an example of how to improve a paragraph or two. Be willing to hurt my feelings so I don’t end up humiliating myself later on. That’s true feedback. That’s what I want!

@ronenstrand @hopefulwonderlandrunaway